Jack outta his box

Jul 17, 2025Jul 17, 2025Matt

A magniloquent wind up bastard
Chartaceous, a wasps nest
Verbose on’t tongue
Clockwork brain with rusted gyral
Death rattles us on tickin’ tocks downward spiral
Did I mention I’m certified unhinged
A wheel short o’ a penny farthin’
Aye, it’s true but thee can’t put me back in’t box
Cuz I upped an’ sprung

Jack sprung from ‘ere

poetisatinta Jul 18, 2025 / 6:38 pm

Glad to see you out of the box to join in – great poem🙌

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- Matt Jul 18, 2025 / 10:46 pm
  
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Ben Jul 18, 2025 / 11:04 pm

Matt – a gritty take on a classic, the use of magniloquent in the first line setting the scene; well played.

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- Matt Jul 19, 2025 / 8:09 am
  
  Thanks!
  
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- Matt Jul 19, 2025 / 8:13 am
  
  I enjoyed your prompt.
  
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  - Ben Jul 19, 2025 / 9:12 am
    
    Thanks Matt 🙏🏻
    
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writingwhatnots Jul 19, 2025 / 9:46 am

‘A wheel short o’ a penny farthin’’ – nice idiom in a wonderfully dark approach.

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- Matt Jul 19, 2025 / 2:46 pm
  
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ben Alexander Jul 20, 2025 / 3:52 pm

Matt, this one’s got such a wild spark—I really felt the jolt in “a wheel short o’ a penny farthin’.” Raw, defiant, totally unboxed.

~David

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- Matt Jul 20, 2025 / 5:25 pm
  
  Thanks! I had a few attempts and all were pretty wild, some got too weird and I decided on simplicity in the end as I kept overcomplicating the concept. Considered trying to write a new version of something I’d already written that would have kinda fitted if I could make it work but if was just becoming complicated to explain in poetry lol
  
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artiecamenzind Jul 21, 2025 / 2:10 pm

you got it!

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- Matt Jul 21, 2025 / 2:35 pm
  
  Thanks.
  
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